Which scene idea is best?

June 18th, 2010 by

1276870276 30 Which scene idea is best? In my story the main characters (Jared and Caitlin) meet at a wedding. Caitlin is a guest at the wedding because her cousin is the bride. Jared and his friend Sebastian sneak into the wedding which is easy because it’s in the garden of a huge house which belongs to the bride. So it starts out where Jared and Seb are watching the actual ceremony where Caitlin is a bridesmaid. When the party starts they sneak in and Sebastian goes right to the dance floor to chat up some girls. Jared is left alone and he and Caitlin see each other through the crowds of people on the dance floor. Jared’s attention is taken away though because someone starts talking to him about how he knows the bride/groom. When he looks again Caitlin isn’t there. Since Jared isn’t a guest he slips inside the house to avoid been caught as a crasher. He looks out of a window and sees Caitlin sat below sat in another section of the garden which is separated from the wedding part by bushes. Now i don’t know what should be in that part of the garden. I have two ideas1) Someone suggested a pool. Caitlin would be at with her feet in the pool, she looks up at the window and sees Jared who smiles then disappears. So she gets up and moves closer to the window to see where he went, he then turns the corner whilst she’s still looking up at the window for him. I would then have her tease him by jumping in the pool, he would follow her, they would flirt and kiss etc. Do you think this would be too Romeo and Juliet like? (the 1996 movie)2) The second one is basically the same except there is no pool instead it would be a rose garden. Caitlin would be sat on one of those sofa swing love seat things and there would be lots of rose bushes. When he turns the corner he gives her a rose from a bush, few words would be exchanged before he would spontaneously kiss her.Argh i don’t think. Suggestions are very much welcome!